The Giver Ending Rewrite

Have any of you read The Giver? I had to read it for a school project and we had to rewrite the ending. So heres my version, hope you like it =)

As they glided over the new fallen snow Joans gripped Gabe close to his chest and willed his eyelids to hold strong against the urge to close allowing him to slip into unconsciousness. Eyes glued to where the land leveled out, he gave his last memory of warmth to Gabriel.

Gabriel’s skin warmed at the memory, and Joans was able to feel the warmth of another human being. They both basked in this newly received gift, but as they began to once again to feel the chill of the air around them, the seconds slowed to a crawl and they were suspended in time. The bitter air had Joans grasping for a logical thought, but he instead found himself hovering above a pool of rational thinking in his subconscious.

Joans was able to see all he should do. How he needed to continue on their journey by foot once gravity took back her greatly needed hand, how he needed to find food for their hollow stomachs, how they critically needed to find a place to rest and regain strength, how they needed some luck, but as luck should have it, all that was in store for the duo was yet another unfortunate turn of events.

With an almost inaudible crunch, the sled hit a lump of snow that had formed on the hill. Gabriel let out a small cry of surprise as the snow touched his exposed skin. Joans tried to save Gabriel from the unforgiving chill that had overcome his own body, but his body heat was too arctic to be of much use to Gabe.

They tumbled down what was left of the slope and finally came to a halt a few feet away from the sled. Without much thought Joans untangled Gabriel’s small limbs from his own, checked what damage had been done to their body’s, and, seeing they had both come out unscathed, stood to place Gabe on the sled, intending to pull him along behind him until they found a safe place to stay.

Yet, with his first step towards the awaiting sled, his knees gave out and he crumpled into the snow that had seconds before been beneath his feet. Seeing that he would be unable to make it to the sled, Joans placed Gabe on his chest and held him close, sharing his favorite memory with the quivering child, until everything faded to black.